Wednesday, September 7, 2016

The Comments

Comments:
~Echo’s I am- I loved it. You can really write. I can really relate to the music, love for animals, being the oldest, caring for my brother like he's the world and not having very close family. The writing itself is just amazing-yes we are not suppose to talk about the writing but great job! Thanks for sharing.
~Echo’s object piece- I love how the story just keeps going and keeps you wanting more. It really gets the reader feeling for the character. The description and the emotion just collide and they make a great short story. It can even get readers to connect to the character.
~Ana’s I am- I love how close of a bond you have with your friends. I can relate to all the adventures and fun. The part where you said "writing at 4am until reality becomes a distant memory" I just love it. It says so many things at once.
~Ana’s object piece- Love the story and the meaning that it holds. Giraffes are cool and the moral of the story is true and amazing. It really engages the reader and has them wanting to keep going and find out what happens next-especially for Alexa.
~Kat’s I am- I love the relationship you have with your brother- I always have wished that I had an older brother. The "need for speed" I can definitely relate. My parents say I have a "speed demon" inside of me. My favorite part was "Strong. Beautiful, loving, and a path of success." :)
~Kat’s object piece- It's beautiful. I love how the box isn't just a box but life itself. It shows that life is hard but you can (and will) get through it eventually. For some reason it reminded me of Mr. Magorium's Wonder Emporium- if you haven't seen it I recommend it- but through the movie the cube is the symbol. Just like the box is the symbol in this story.
~Kam’s I am- Good job! I love how you put "an age for discovery and newfound independence." at the end. I can relate to being adventurous and missing the simpler days.
~Kam’s object piece- I love the connection you put into the story between you and the baseball. The story really shows how much you love the sport and your passion for it. Great story and really descriptive and passionate.

1 comment:

  1. Thanks for being a friendly and supportive reader for your classmates, Nichole! I'm sure they appreciate your feedback.

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